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雅思大作文范文分析——人工智能

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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.


翻譯:有人認為,在不久的將來,人工智能領域的發展將對我們的生活產生積極影響。而另外一些人則認為我們并沒有為此做好準備。 討論雙邊的觀點,并給出自己的看法。


話題:科技類


類型:雙邊討論


關鍵詞:artificial intelligence,  lives in the near future,  not prepared


解析:


說到人工智能(AI)對于很多人而言,最熟悉的應該就是呆萌小助手‘Siri’ 啦,當然還有Bixby ,小愛同學等等,既可以陪你聊天,又可以查天氣,設鬧鐘。雖然有時候還是有點不聽話或是喜歡‘裝傻’,但也的確為我們的生活增添了不少便利。


在DeepMind,英偉達等大公司看中AI的巨大前景,轟轟烈烈的開展研究時,大眾對于人工智能的認識卻并不深,往往停留在語音助手,智能客服上面。


直到一個又一個令人震驚的新聞出現在媒體報道中,DeepMind的人工智能機器人AlphaGo通過對百萬盤真人對戰棋局的研究,以4:1的成績擊敗了世界圍棋冠軍李世石。(大家可以用作舉例論證:AlphaGo is an AI developed by Google-owned British company DeepMind, and had already wrapped up a historic victory on Saturday by becoming the first ever computer program to beat the world champion Lee Se-dol.)


孟買人工智能創業公司MoglA通過2000萬個社交媒體數據點分析了社交媒體上人們的情緒,精準的通過了解民意預測出了美國總統大選的結果-特朗普獲勝。而這一結果是很多內部人士都預測失敗的。 (MogIA correctly predicted the past four presidential elections including the Trump one.)


大眾慢慢意識到,人工智能的頂級聰明才智及復雜性。意識到原來鋼鐵俠的賈維斯是可能真實存在的。繼續發展下去,人工智能很快就會在各個領域超越人類。  AI system becomes more powerful – superior to human performance in many or nearly all domains. 


人工智能比人類能干并不可怕,人類可以利用其才能為自己的生活增添便利。


但是極其聰明又不知疲倦的 AI has the potential to improve productivity, efficiency and accuracy. 會有很多人因其失去工作,普華永道曾發布數據預測到2030年,機器人將占據日本21%以上的工作崗位、英國30%的工作崗位、德國35%的工作崗位和美國38%的工作崗位。到下個世紀,他們將占據人類現有工作的一半以上。尤其是那些 jobs involving repetitive or basic problem-solving tasks.


當有一天人工智能發展到自我實現階段,他們像人類一樣要求自己的權利。當他們不再只是做邏輯思考和計算,開始出現感性思維時, 人工智能對人類的威脅或許就會出現。如果極其聰明的人工智能不再聽命如舊,不再遵循人類的旨意,人類又將如何應對。


而這樣的人工智能其實已經離我們很近了。因曾揚言要毀滅人類而被人熟知的機器人索菲亞,在2017年10月獲得了沙特阿拉伯授予的公民身份。而她的名言:人不犯我我不犯人(If you’re nice to me and I will be nice to you),  更是令人毛骨悚然。倘若有一天,像電影《終結者》中那樣,機器人想要反叛人類,占領世界,人類是否有能力戰勝自己親手締造出來的全知全能的敵人呢?


太空探索技術的CEO馬斯克曾說:“我們需要萬分警惕人工智能, 他們比核武器更加危險” 而霍金(Stephen Hawking)也曾說:the emergence of artificial intelligence could be the "worst event in the history of our civilization."(作文可用)


人類至今也很難預測及探究AI最終會進化成什么樣子,是拉開和人類的戰爭,還是與人類和平共處。 但需防患于未然, 對AI的獨立運作需要加以嚴格的控制,保證是人類在控制機器,而非機器在控制人,(對于這個題目,還有一個有些難度,但是可以寫的點,列給大家,大家可以酌情使用:

AI-enabled terrorism: Artificial intelligence will change the way conflicts are fought from autonomous drones, robotic swarms, and remote and nanorobot attacks. In addition to being concerned with a nuclear arms race, we'll need to monitor the global autonomous weapons race.) 


好啦,分析了這么多,咱們來一起看看今天的范文:


People seem to be either excited or worried(很巧妙的改寫了題目) about the future impact of artificial intelligence. Personally I can understand the two opposing points of view(可直接搬到自己的文章中使用); I am both fascinated by developments in artificial intelligence and apprehensive(adj. 憂慮的;不安的) about its possible negative effects.


(開頭段:題目改寫+觀點給出—可借用的部分:People seem to be either xx or xx about 題目事件. )


On the one hand, the increasing intelligence of technology should bring some obvious benefits. Machines are clearly able to do many jobs better than humans can, especially in areas that require high levels of accuracy or calculations using large amounts of data. For example, robots are being developed that can carry out surgical procedures with greater precision than a human doctor, and we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves. (這個例子大家可以記住,科技改變生活的題目中都可以廣泛使用-科技為人類帶來的好處)Such technologies can improve safety by reducing the likelihood of human errors. It is easy to imagine how these developments, and many others, will steadily improve our quality of life.


(主體1段-第一方觀點:一共5句話,結構:觀點-解釋-舉例-分析-總結)


On the other hand, I share the concerns of people who believe that artificial intelligence may harm us if we are not careful. In the short term, it is likely that we will see a rise in unemployment as workers in various industries are replaced by machines or software programs. For example, self-driving vehicles are expected to cause redundancies(原型:redundancy:名詞-裁員,解雇) in driving jobs, such as lorry(貨車) drivers, taxi drivers and bus drivers. In the medium term, if intelligent technologies gradually take jobs away from humans, we may find that people become deskilled and lose their sense of purpose in life. A longer term fear is that computers become so intelligent that they begin to make decisions without human oversight(名詞:負責,照管,監督) and without regard for our well-being.


(主體2段-第二方觀點-結構:遞進式-短期-中期-長期)


In conclusion, while intelligent machines will no doubt improve our lives in many ways, the potential risks of such technologies should not be ignored.


(結尾:總結前文-可借用句型:While A will no doubt do sth., the potential risks of A should not be ignored.)


這篇文章出自Simon老師,對于Native Speaker又身為前考官的Simon而言,其英語語言駕馭能力肯定是很強的。這篇文章的句型及論證方法都很不錯,尤其是主體2段的遞進式論證很出彩,大家可以學習借鑒使用哦。


但本文中有一點小編要提醒大家:


我們可以看到其在開頭的表態為較中立的態度。想要看中立態度怎么寫的同學可以好好看看這篇文章。


但對于寫作分數在6.5分以下的同學,這種中立態度的寫法不推薦給大家,即便是雙邊討論類的文章,雙邊雖都要討論到,也不推薦大家進行使用。


雅思寫作明確規定了,要立場清晰,立場當然包括中立。但就像我以前跟大家說過的:中立不好寫,需要比較強的語言掌控能力,能把事情說清楚了,句子寫明白了,不能出現歧義或者unclear,否則行文之中出現誤解很有可能判斷為立場不清晰。


所以建議大家盡量采取一邊倒的態度,主體段依然需要雙邊都討論,然后在結尾繼續重申自己的立場- 雖然可能A方觀點成立,但是B方在各種情況下都更有道理等等。 


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